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I understand that you did this traditionally, so going back in and erasing the lineart (done in pen) isn't really possible. The lineart around her legs and arms looks rather sketchy. If you want to achieve neater, straighter lines, try drawing with your arm, by keeping your hand steady and just moving your arm.
The rest is anatomical: Her arms are as thick as her legs, which makes her look very disproportionate. Her thighs probably need to be made a little thicker next time, while her arms need to be made a little thinner.
Her torso is just a little long, but that is easily fixed by just starting her waist higher.
The last critique I will provide for this piece is the hair. The concept is there, but the execution doesn't quite hit the mark. Instead of just coloring the hair, certain pieces should be defined more. That way, the orange bangs will flow more into the blue, rather than the harsh contrast that there is, now.
I think this is really good work! Just some minor tweaking, and you will be on your way
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